pink hair,hair care: What do you think of my story?

its a sasuke uchiha story but i've done more on quizilla village of ice heres the sample:

Village of Ice

Hello my name Is raven kutszenov and right now I鈥檓 on a journey to find my father who is currently at the village konohagure-or konoha for short. I鈥檝e heard that my father is a jounin in this village a teacher of sorts. I鈥檓 only a genin- a ninja in training. My special ability is ice but unlike most I don鈥檛 have to use hand signs or seals to summon up strong surges of chakra-energy it just comes to me without hesitation. This story will be read in first person allowing you -the reader to get in my thoughts without using words like she, he, her鈥ct. Just follow the story regularly just put yourself in the story. Now my appearance in the story Is simple blue eyes silver hair black highlights and half wolf demon. Now shall we start with the story?

you are aware that I鈥檒l have to deal with 4 students if we put her in my team aren鈥檛 you.

Well yes I am aware of this but, she is not like them in fact she鈥檚 the total opposite of them. Her powers exceed that even of the kyubbi-demon fox. Which is sealed in naruto. She doesn鈥檛 have to use hand seals to summon up her full power of chakra which puts her in a situation as being the perfect student for team seven.

Yes I understand lord hokakge.

Since when was the last time have you had to deal with carrying your bags says sounga as his smaller necklace version of himself hangs around your neck asks you. well I guess never until now then huh. I guess we should be hurrying along though if you want to meet your sensei. Sigh you鈥檙e right lets go.

What鈥檚 taking kakashi sensei so long to get here. He should have been here by now. Is he still trying to get those ichi ichi paradise books you know they don鈥檛 come out for another month or so.

Naruto must you always state something out the ordinary? Ugh its just like you to say something like this.

Will the both of you just knock it off already.

What, why should I you鈥檙e not the boss of me what gives you the idea you can boss me around huhn?

Naruto leave sasuke alone! Or I鈥檒l rip you to shreds.

Back with you

Hah we finally made it. It took you a while to figure that one out didn鈥檛 it. Shut up sounga no ones listening to you. Well are you going to open the door or are you going stand outside looking stupefied. Oh yeah right, the door. You open the door to find 2 men discussing something one was an old man and the other was a man with white hair and mask covering his mouth with his headband covering his right eye.

Welcome so you must be raven kutszenov am I right says the old man. This is your teacher hatake kakashi you will be in team seven then. With鈥?br> Haruno sakura, uchiha sasuke, and uzumaki naruto cuts in the man with the white hair. Its so nice to meet you I鈥檝e heard you鈥檙e from the village of ice is that correct.

Yes that is, so are we going to be leaving now.

Oh right of course lets go.

Finally master kakashi what took you so long to get here and who鈥檚 this? A girl with pink hair points to you.

My name is raven kutszenov and if you have any common sense you wouldn鈥檛 put your finger in my face like that if you know what鈥檚 good for you.

A boy with blonde hair comes into your face and looks at you intently.

What are you looking at take a picture it鈥檒l last longer you know. A boy leaning on a tree starts to chuckle at this. What are you laughing at pretty boy you鈥檙e not that special. He stops and gives you a dirty looking glare.

Huhn is all he says.

Well now since you were late on the first test you鈥檒l have to fight sasuke. To match your strength of course.

Sasuke as you now know him dose 15 hand seals and dose two that are familiar to you the horse and the tiger and fire comes from his mouth. And comes for you. But you simply block it with Ice shield. It starts to rain which is perfect for you suddenly your eyes glow an icy blue. shuriken, kunai ice blades. The rain then turns in to ice shaped shuriken and kunai. And sasuke can鈥檛 dodge it and is automatically sent flying backwards.

Well bravo very good raven.

Not yet I won鈥檛 lose says sasuke suddenly throwing a kunai your way.

You quickly dodged it doing a turn flip pulling out two of your steel fans and creating a wind DANCE OF THE DRAGONS you said is all it took as two twisters took turn. Then using them again DANCE OF THE BLADES 2 blades struck through the dragon twister. You smirked as you thought you might have caught him off guard but you didn鈥檛 he was now behind you. Kakashi interested in looking at more didn鈥檛 stop you. He had you locked, but you slipped out of his grip drop-kicked him and before he hit the ground at the precise time you kicked him into the air when he came back down you did a double side kick into a tree. It doesn鈥檛 stop him he comes behind you again but you jump out of his hold. And then perform a beautiful dance move before calling out -BLOOD LIMIT you then transformed your hair a lighter silver without the black highlights and your icy blue eyes darker a choker around your neck and your swords the sounga and tokijin crossed on your back. You land safely on the ground your chakra growing eternally stronger by the minute. You then pull both swords from their sheaths jumping doing a front flip creating the double blade edged wind scar. It leaves a large gash in the ground and you transform back to normal self as you know you have intimidated the team of people flabbergasted right in front of you.

Hey are you even there-helooo anyone awake. If not I鈥檓 leaving

No wait how鈥檇 you that, you hardly used any chakra with that move.

that鈥檚 because I didn鈥檛 use any.

What do you mean I don鈥檛 get it.

She means that it didn鈥檛 take much for her to use the move she just did you dunce.

Well how was I suppose to know uchiha dog. Why don鈥檛 you go out with your boyfriend kiba he鈥檚 waiting for you around the corner.

What was that naruto tell me again what you just said. Naruto turned around to see a boy in a gray jacket with black around the fur and a little white dog poking out of his shirt.

OWWW KIBA!!!!!!!!!! What was that for!!

That was for being a baka. Baka.